Help: Essay peer edits

[chris1neji]

I need a bit of help with an essay I wrote. I have this due tomorrow, I began on it yesterday. It may be a bit sloppy so far I had 1 person looked at it.

Please help me with my thesis, and conclusion i need a lot of help.
I didn't restrict the editing, however PLEASE use comments to add any info.
My latest copy is draft 2.

Please use "Personal...(comments by Draz)" as en axample on how to do it.

 

[smarteyeball]

I've reworded some phrases etc to make it 'flow' better overall. (I found it easier to 'edit' than to 'comment )

View attachment Personal Abstinence Report SEB EDIT.docx

 

[chris1neji]

Thank you so much, comments just make it easier for me to keep track of changes. I save all my homework assignments to my PC. I been doing this since High School years.